This is wonderful: Vanity Fair have given Sarah Palin’s resignation speech the editorial once-over, and published their red-pen scribblings. Wonderful to pick through and work out their reasoning.
Remember, though: this is simply getting the facts and form right. The harder part is taking the tight draft and thinking through the flow, the emotional arc, the overall shape of the thing. When the writing’s this bad it’s hard to see the structure, but getting the structure right is crucial.